骑士老师，这是中心出的关于离婚率的图表作文。您看看，我能得多少分？

It is shown from the figure that the divorce rates in china increased from less than 1 percent in 1959 to 3 percent in 1979 and to 9 percent in 1999.
A number of factors could account for the growth in divorce rates in china. First, with the reform and opening-up, more and more people have an impact on western culture, and think divorce is correct. In the past, people’s mind is not change, although he or she did not satisfy the family, they will not choice divorce. Second, there are many enormous changes on divorce of society’s attitude. Public opinion will encourage the new concept to develop instead of not accept that any more. Third, with the development of economy, people’s income increased sharply, they can afford the divorce.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely come to the conclusion that people’s attitude to the family have been changed.

总的来讲，写的不错，中间一段有些句子结构需要注意，最后一段总结最好能起到画龙点睛的作用。可以得到9-10分。

It is shown from the figure that the divorce rate in China increased from less than 1 percent in 1959 to 3 percent in 1979 and to 9 percent in 1999.
A number of factors could account for the growth in divorce rate in China. Firstly, with the reform and opening-up, more and more people have been influenced by western culture and they think that divorce is not something shameful. In the past, the situation was quite different. Divorce is not a very good thing. Even though he might not be satisfied with the family, he would not choose to divorce. Secondly, people’s attitude towards divorce has changed greatly. Public opinions have accepted the fact that if the couple do not feel happy they should divorce which benefits both. Thirdly, with the development of economy, people’s income has increased sharply, they can afford the divorce.
From what having been discussed above, we may safely come to the conclusion that people’s attitude towards the family has been changed.（最好表明自己的观点，而不只是陈述事实。）

谢谢您百忙之中抽出时间帮我修改作文，我一定努力，考试取得好成绩。