大家把附件的作文题目写一下。

这个作文太难了不知道从何写起,明天再构思写吧,我先把模拟三的作文写在这儿,望老师批正,指出我的语法错误,及如何避免,像这样的最少能给几分?谢谢!

The influence of 3G Mobile on Our Life
        With the rapid development of social economy, an increasing number of people come to realize that the influence of 3g mobile is vital of importance,which makes us become a whole world and we can communicate others at everytime and everywherer. In my view ,i think it has a far-reaching impact on our modern life.
         At first, 3g mobile makes us convenience.for instance,business people keep frequently contact depending on it. what's more, we can seek for help immediately with it when we face difficulties.in example,the people trapped in isaland during hurricane can be successfully rescued with the help of 3g mobile. in factor,one coin already has two sides.people gradually realize the disadvantage of mobile brought about.in the first place,it may demage our healty through emission the radiation. in the second place, when we lost our mobile,our privacy may be revealed .
          from all above,the influence of 3g mobile has both positive and negative effects.the well using way is to regular it in order to maximize its advantage and miximize its disadvantage.
唉,有时写作文词不达意,这样简单的题目我都写了将近一小时的时间,唉,真没用啊,越来越没有信心了

[ 本帖最后由 zhangyong08 于 2008-5-23 00:36 编辑 ]

very poor，像我这样的水平老师您说是否就过不了卷二 苦恼啊都快考试了
With the rapid improvment of people’s living standard, an increasing number of people come to realize that influence of example in their living,working and learning. In the first picture , the man writes the name of Beckham on his face. In the second picture, another man has his hair as Beckham costing 300yuan. These pictures described idolater seeked after enthusiastic their example.  
      The kind of people seeking stars have been popular in the morden society. What have these  football superstars brought about to people,strengh or threat? At first, these examples has affected on people’s living and learning. For instance, in the past period during supergirl shows these student pause their learning in order to come on with their example. In the factors, one coin has two sides. The example can became people’s motive of working and learning. They may make people work hard to obtain better grades and chances than their example can do.
       Above all, in my view, I think people should maximize its advantage and miximize its disadvantage, leading to people’s example　become their motive to working.

有时自己写的自己也看不懂，老师您说像我这样的还有必要再练作文吗？是否再怎么练也就这个水平提高不了？您说像这样的考试中作文最多能拿几分？

可数不可数还有词性及动词的及物与否也分不清楚？急啊．．．．．